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Tuesday, June 7, 2011

Redundancies.

"You know, Ted, you're a smart, intelligent man," she said, conversingly.

He sat down in his chair, which was sitting on the floor, and smiled with his lips. "Why thank you, Dorothy," he thanked Dorothy.

He thought she was pretty dumb. "You're pretty dumb, Dorothy," he said, buttering his toast with butter.

Dorothy slapped him with her hand. His facial cheeks flushed maroon red with shocked surprised amazement.

"How dare you call me dumb!" Dorothy yelled, waving her fist in the air around her with her fingers curled tightly inward and her arm moving back and forth.

"I just think you're very redundant, I think," he thought.

She shook her head, above her shoulders. "Redundant?" she repeated, questioningly.

He nodded, using his neck.

"Well," she said, "I think you're pretty repetitive too as well, Ted, also," she told Ted.

And they continued to fight for the rest of the day, while the sun was still out.

12 comments:

  1. Haha...great point!! Point....

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  2. Here I'm thinking.... "What the hell is going on?" I would blame it on how early it is but that would just be a lie... after all it was one of my many blonde moments.

    You'll be happy to know I figured it out and now you've left me giggling.

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  3. Ha! Great post and an excellent way to illustrate redundancies. This is something I definitely struggle with - although I hope it's not as obvious as the above.

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  4. LOL! That is just awesome! =)

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  5. Dorothy. Dorothy. Dorothy. Did you listen to a word he said, Dorothy?

    Hehe. Funny blog post!

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  6. This is hilarious~ thanks for the laugh!

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  7. Wow, it took me a few minutes to read through that. How did you feel writing it? XD

    Anyway, it's a good piece and you show your redundancies well. I liked it. =)

    -Tara

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  8. I never laughed so hard. Perfect example of redundancy.

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  9. Bwa haha! She laughed, as laughter bubbled out of her mouth between her lips.

    *snrk* That was a fun one :D

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  10. Haha. I loved it! How did you manage to write it though?

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  11. I've written, in my writing, pieces exactly just like this.

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  12. HMM... this looks familiar... *glances at inbox*

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